if a person is below the federal povery level Medicaid is granted
In North Carolina and all other states, it will not matter the age, employment, disability, etc., if a person is below the federal poverty level Medicaid is granted.
Lewis is right - there is no problem with the passive voice and you need a comma after level. But he missed a bigger problem. You have joined two independent with a comma. The first is "it will not matter," and the second is "Medicaid may be granted."
To correct this, you have three choices.
1) Add a conjunction after the comma.
2) Change the comma to a period.
3) Change the comma to a semi-colon.
There really isn't a great conjunction to use in this case. Either the period or semi-colon will work.
If this is for academic writing, I recommend you delete "etc." from the sentence. It adds some vagueness to the sentence. It says, "I really don't feel like listing everything or finding a way to rewrite the sentence." Many teachers will translate that into "I'm lazy" and give you a poor mark for that point. Here is a way to rewrite this.
In North Carolina and all other states, status such as age, employment or disability does not matter. If a person is below the federal poverty line, Medicaid may be granted.
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Passive voice is grammatically correct, and this sentence is a good use for it. I see no need to change this to active voice, which would require the introduction of the government entity that grants Medicaid.
You do have other problems, however. You need a comma after 'level'. I would also recommend changing 'is granted' to 'may be granted'. Not all people who apply for Medicaid will receive it, even if they are below the poverty level.
In North Carolina and all other states, it will not matter the age, employment, disability, etc., if a person is below the federal poverty level, Medicaid may be granted.
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