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Grammarly says...

...incomplete comparisons in these sentences in my novel:

Ann asked, "Why are you so quiet? You have not even eaten your food. What's wrong?"

She could not even describe to herself, what she was feeling, much less to anyone else.

...passive voice in thse sentences:

She wondered, "Do these people not realize, that it is 1972?"

The reason I had trouble sleeping was because I was so thrilled.

The camp is named for the river.

Hope was accustomed to seeing guys and gals swimming in the same pool.

Hope was startled back to reality, when Ann plopped down next to her.

Hope noticed that Bible study classes were segregated just as swimming groups were segregated.

THANK YOU!

MM

See example:

BNKBNKBNKBNK! "That alarm sound is so weird.
asked Apr 01 '12 at 21:28 Marsha New member

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Tolley makes excellent points about passive voice.

 

I believe that, in effort to encourage young students to use the active voice, we have somehow over stigmatized the passive voice. Both voices have their place in both fiction and non-fiction.

 

If I have a nit to pick with Grammarly, it is the incomplete comparision comment. Grammarly wants the comparision to be complete within the confines of the sentence.That is, if you say something is better (or worse, or higher, or less ...), Grammarly wants you to say than what in the same sentence.

 

Grammarly strict interpretation does not allow for allusion to previous sentences (or paragraphs). For instance, to say "Benjamin Holt, on his return from London, invented a better all-terrain tractor for use in the San Joaquin Delta islands" draws Grammarly's ire even though the previous two paragraphs have been about the equipment that came before and its shortcomings.

 

In your case, the comparison "much less" is complete and understandable, even if the software (which doesn't understand the meaning) does not recognize it as such.

link comment answered Apr 01 '12 at 22:42 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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