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Although, I prepared the presentation, it results unacceptable to my expectations; during the speech, I made long pauses and a few gestures caused by nervousness that betrayed my memory.
asked Dec 19 '13 at 01:13 Bianca New member

I don't know why the delay occurred. I'm just a volunteer here and not connected with the software company at all. If you have a pending question, check in daily to see if there is an answer.

Lewis NeidhardtJan 09 at 13:35

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There are a few errors in this sentence. The comma after 'although' is incorrect. 'It' should be 'its', and 'were' should follow 'results'. The semicolon is correct, but I think this would work better as two sentences. I would change the verbs in the second sentence.  'That betrayed my memory' doesn't make sense.  I would change this part as shown.

 

Although I prepared the presentation, its results were unacceptable to my expectations.  During the speech, I had long pauses and made a few gestures that betrayed my nervousness.

link answered Dec 19 '13 at 13:19 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

Thank you so much Lewis N. I am really working on my grammar because I am still making big mistakes and I really want to improve it.

BiancaJan 09 at 04:48

Last question, Do you know why I just get the answer in my inbox, if you answered on Dec. 19?

BiancaJan 09 at 04:50

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