This is very urgent. I want to bail my friend out. Please help me in this regard. I know we are not supposed to send you long texts for the correction. I am sorry for the inconvenience caused to you.
I am requesting you at the outset, to recall my having been associated with your Kindself's organaization of repute for a decade. I have been rendering flawless and diligent service, which has won laurrels and accolodes from your end more often than not. But, to my dismay I find myself in an awkward state by an inadverdent mistake causing disgrace to my illustrious acquintance.There was nothing intentional for self gains as it is evident from the inspection report of your staff pertaining to any misappropriation or malpractice.
I have been discharging my duties to the best of my ability in compliance with the protocols of the company and hence I am requesting your kindself to consider my continuing in the same state. I believe that every event has a purpose and the setbacks its lessons. To err is human and on this accord I beg your pardon for the mishaps occured while assuring you that such silly errors which could grow like a monster to tarnish me and my hard and sincere work hitherto, do not recurr.
Pray I am pardoned and erase this that has pushed me to latency.I am ascertaining of my unruffled commitment to the growth of our relationship. Thanking you and assuring your goodself of my sincerity, I remain with
In addition to the errors that Courtney pointed out, I would completely rewrite every sentence of this letter. Many of the words and phrases (hitherto and your kind self) are considered archaic in the US. What causes disgrace to a person varies greatly depending on the culture. An inadvertent mistake would not do so in the US. I would never use the word silly in this letter because it makes light of a situation. However, I cannot advise you as to how your terminology is viewed in your culture.
Please remember that those of us who participate on this forum are not employees of Grammarly. We show up and respond because we enjoy discussing grammar. Urgent requests will not make us "work" faster as this is not a job. It is 3:20am where I live. The only reason I am responding so quickly is because I woke up in the middle of the night and could not get back to sleep.
|link||answered Mar 31 '12 at 07:28 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
Usually, the introduction of a letter like that is "Dear Sir." I found mainly some punctuation and spelling errors. It would had helped if you had ran this through Grammarly first and corrected the ones you knew to change. For instance, if you had run the checker, you'd have found that laurels, accolades, inadvertent, acquaintance, occurred, organization, and recur were all spelled wrong. Likewise, if you had run the checker, you'd have noticed that you missed the space after the period in two places and omitted one or more commas. I don't know exactly what "goodself" means, as that is a term of endearment we don't have here.
The sentence about erring and silly mistakes at the end of paragraph 2 should be split or simplified. It contains squinting modifiers, so you don't know what the clause "like a monster" modifies. The which should be changed to that, and hitherto is redundant.
I am clueless about what this sentence means:
Pray I am pardoned and erase this that has pushed me to latency.
Beyond the scope of Grammarly, you might want to make your apology more low-key. If you overdo an apology, your audience may find it insincere. The tone of the entire letter comes across as wordy as well as stilted and archaic.
|link||edited Mar 31 '12 at 07:42 Courtney Contributor|
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