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The violent patients were on display for the public to pay a penny to see, the milder ones they sent out to beg for charity.

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The violent patients were on display for the public to pay a penny to see, the milder ones they sent out to beg for charity.
asked Dec 10 '13 at 22:02 jessica New member

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You should have a semicolon, a conjunction, or a separate sentence after 'see'. What you have is called a comma splice.

 

The violent patients were on display for the public to pay a penny to see; the milder ones they sent out to beg for charity.

The violent patients were on display for the public to pay a penny to see, but the milder ones they sent out to beg for charity.

The violent patients were on display for the public to pay a penny to see.  The milder ones they sent out to beg for charity.

link comment answered Dec 10 '13 at 22:41 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

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