issues with passive voice usage
trouble with passive voice use
With the support of health professionals including mental health nurses that work in the community, four workshops were held with groups of homeless young people.
With the support of community mental health nurses and other health professionals, our nonprofit organization held four workshops with groups of homeless young people.
The other responses state that the nurses and health professionals held the workshops, but the original sentence says otherwise. According to that sentence, the nurses and health professionals supported an unknown actor which held the workshops--they didn't necessarily hold the workshops themselves. Neither does the sentence say that the health professionals supported the young people in the workshops. The health professionals supported the unknown actor which held the workshops. They might have attended the workshops, but they might have simply been consulted as resources. So as it stands, it's not possible to make the original sentence active using only the information we have because no actor is named. In order to correctly make the sentence active, a subject must be invented and supplied.
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