Sentence Structure problem

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I dont know if the sentence below is a Comma Splice, Run-on, Dangling Modifier or a Misplaced Modifier?How to correct it?

 

Lines for Star Wars tickets ran around the block some people had even set up tents.

asked Mar 27 '12 at 00:33 Cenen gozun New member

I think it works as two sentences. Lines for Star Wars Tickets ran around the block. Some people had even set up tents.

Janet Kay JensenMar 27 '12 at 03:22

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The most obvious problem is that your sample is a run-on sentence. The text should be divided between "block" and "some"

 

"... around the block. Some people ..."

" ... around the block; some people ..."

" ... around the block, and some people ..."

 

Also, was there one line or multiple lines? It is more common to say "The line for ..." rather than "Lines for ..." And, although not wrong, various authorities consider "some people" to be wordy. You could use either "some" or "people" and convey the same meaning.

link answered Mar 27 '12 at 02:46 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

thank you so much..

Cenen gozunMar 27 '12 at 03:10

No matter how you slice it, you have two independent clauses.

TolleyMar 27 '12 at 16:20

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Like others are saying, the biggest problem is a run-on sentence.  If you want to keep it as one, you might say:

 

Since the line for Star Wars tickets ran around the block, some had to set up tents.

 

Or shorter and no punctuation:

The line for Star Wars tickets was so long that some had to set up tents.

link answered Mar 27 '12 at 19:52 Courtney Contributor

thank you Courtney...

Cenen gozunMar 28 '12 at 00:06

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