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findings from the study shows that for every health condition examined between the two countries poor health outcomes were more higher for the US adults than the Europeans and the health of the poor.minority us particulalry worse coampared to their european counterpart

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Findings from the study shows that every health condition examined between the two countries poor health outcomes were more higher for the US adults than the Europeans and the health of the poor/minority is particularly worse compared to their European counterpart.
asked Nov 09 '13 at 15:49 sena green New member

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The findings of a study on health conditions in the  the United States and Europe reveal poorer health outcomes, particularly amung the poor and minorities in the US. 

link comment answered Nov 09 '13 at 19:38 Robin Delk New member
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I would rewrite the sentence:

 

The study examined the average health conditions in the US and the European countries. It revealed the adults in the US had poorer health than their European counterparts. It was even worse for minorities and the poor.

link comment answered Nov 11 '13 at 15:12 Qiaoshang New member

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