From the beginning, I was very good at studies. So I sailed through my education journey with great ease. When my finished my lower secondary, my father didn’t have a job. My mother was the only bread winner for the family. In addition, I had a younger sister at home. The task of taking care of her was all alone my responsibility.
All along, My education was plain sailing as I was very studious. By the time I finished my lower secondary, my father had lost his job. As a result, my mother had to bring home the bacon. Meanwhile, the task of taking care of my younger sister, apart from attending the school, was also my responsibility.
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Over all, I did well in school because I was very studious. By the time I finished my lower secondary, my father had lost his job. As a result, my mother was the only breadwinner for the family, and the task of caring for my younger sister, apart from attending school, became my responsibility.
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