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However, as Faulkner, point out, despite the sorrow Emily seemed like a mentally disturbed.

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However, as Faulkner, point out, despite the sorrow Emily seemed like a mentally disturbed.
asked Oct 30 '13 at 22:24 diana ferradas New member

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Yes, you have a few problems here, Diana. 

 

There should be no comma after Faulkner.  You need "point" to agree with Faulkner - either points or pointed.  Because of the context, I'll assume it should be in the past tense - pointed.

 

You need a comma before Emily.

 

You have three introductory clauses.  Any one could start off the sentence alone.  Three is a bit much and makes the sentence somewhat awkward.

However, Emily seemed ...

As Faulkner pointed out, Emily seemed ...

Despite the sorrow, Emily seemed ...

 

Emily seemed like a mentally disturbed _____?  You are missing a noun.  Either add one (mentally disturbed woman) or delete "like a" and say she seemed mentally disturbed. 

link comment answered Oct 30 '13 at 23:43 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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