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Hi guys, am new here so be friendly, lol

well am planning to study pharamacy at university and i am finding it ver difficult to start my personal statement. An expereinced person told me have have a memrable start as it will remind the admission tutors of your PS. Any ideas??

See example:

Last year, I attended Chemistry and Material science master classes at Oxford University, which involved collaborative working with students from various part of the country.
asked Oct 26 '13 at 19:53 Habib New member

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I think that in 'Material Science', both words should be capitalized.  'Collaborative working' doesn't work for me. I would use either 'working collaboratively' or 'collaborative work'. 'Parts' needs to be plural.  Anything with Oxford U. should grab their attention.   I would use the dates of your attendance. 'Last year' gets obsolete quickly.  Good luck. One of my stepsons is a Pharm. D. and he loves it. He teaches and does research.

 

In 2012, I attended Chemistry and Material Science master classes at Oxford University, which involved working collaboratively with students from various parts of the country.

link comment answered Oct 26 '13 at 20:07 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

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