Wordiness, caused by redundant categoreis
The question below was flag because of the category is made redundant by the specific word, period of time.
It might occur when first diagnosis or over a period of time.
asked Mar 22 '12 at 20:59
gerri
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gerri
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1 answer 
Yes, "period of time" is redundant.
You can say "over time" to convey the same meaning with fewer words.
Also, "when" is presents a problem. Suggest "when first diagnosed" (for the past tense) or "on first diagnosis".
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answered Mar 22 '12 at 21:35
Jeff Pribyl
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