Wordiness, caused by redundant categoreis

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The question below was flag because of the category is made redundant by the specific word, period of time.

 

 

 

 

It might occur when first diagnosis or over a period of time.

asked Mar 22 '12 at 20:59 gerri New member

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Yes, "period of time" is redundant.

 

You can say "over time" to convey the same meaning with fewer words.

 

Also, "when" is presents a problem.  Suggest "when first diagnosed" (for the past tense) or "on first diagnosis".

link comment answered Mar 22 '12 at 21:35 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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