and then versus then
In a novel I'm writing, I often want to describe a sequence of events as briefly as possible, and prefer to use "then," rather than "and then" to complete the sequence. To my ear this sounds natural and makes for tighter writing. But a colleague suggests it is ungrammatical. Here is an example:
I insert the key into the lock, turn it softly, then fling the door open till it thumps against the wall.
Your comments, please.
I think your colleague is correct, but your novel is not formal writing. I would probably go with "and" rather than "then" or "and then". The nice thing about a novel is that you can call any writing choice poetic license. Whether the reader feels it is poetic or awkward is the important thing. This specific choice is so minor that it won't make or break the success of your novel.
|link comment||answered Oct 05 '13 at 07:06 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
yes of course they are right but use the( then ,or and then ) depend on your novel ,what do you want to explain ?
one novel writter how much wants to explain and rearrange and sequence the story ,they should use tha all grammar rolls .who much prepositions ,adjectives , story needs , we con not to stay only withe (then or -and then )
all the best
|link comment||answered Oct 05 '13 at 16:30 Mahjabin Andar New member|
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