Are my commas in the right place?
If you want a professional photographer, staging consultation and a marketing strategy, I am the Realtor for you! I would love the opportunity to discuss how my marketing plan, sells homes fast! Please contact me for additional information about the selling your home!
I would put a comma after 'consultation'. It's optional, but it is preferred. The comma after 'plan' is wrong, and this isn't optional.
'Fast' is an adjective, but you're using it as an adverb. 'Sells homes fast' is a good catchphrase, but it's grammatically incorrect. 'Sells homes quickly' would be correct but not as catchy.
You should have 'about the selling of your home' or 'about selling your home.' Not an option here, either.
I'd like to make a suggestion on style. Your list of wants is a photographer, consultation, and strategy. The first is a person, the second is talk, and the third is an idea. If they were all the same genre, it would make better sense. I made them all people, because you're trying to sell a person.
If you want a professional photographer, staging consultant, and a marketing strategist, I am the Realtor for you! I would love the opportunity to discuss how my marketing plan sells homes fast/quickly! Please contact me for additional information about the selling of your home!
|link comment||answered Oct 03 '13 at 20:16 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow|
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