Punctuation within a sentence.
Wouldn't a comma after "hands" be awkward to the flow of the sentence?
Beneath his hands a familiar heat began to radiate through her, arousing forgotten sensations, forbidden needs.
Place the gerund phrase 'arousing forgotten sensations and forbidden needs' near the word it modifies. Here,in the given sentence, the gerund phrase modifies the subject 'heat'. Therefore, the sentence can be rewritten as
Arousing forgotten sensations and forbidden needs,a familiar heat beneath his hands began to radiate through her.
I hope, I didn't alter the intended meaning.
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