Punctuation within a sentence.

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Wouldn't a comma after "hands" be awkward to the flow of the sentence?

See example:

Beneath his hands a familiar heat began to radiate through her, arousing forgotten sensations, forbidden needs.
asked Mar 10 '12 at 11:31 Edward Halpin New member

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Place the gerund phrase 'arousing forgotten sensations and forbidden needs' near the word it modifies. Here,in the given sentence,  the gerund phrase modifies the subject 'heat'. Therefore, the sentence can be rewritten as

 

Arousing forgotten sensations and forbidden needs,a familiar heat beneath his hands began to radiate through her.

 

I hope, I didn't alter the intended meaning.

link comment edited Mar 10 '12 at 14:30 vinay Contributor

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