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Please proof read this sentence.
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The first interpretation presents the conflict between the evil and good giving due consideration to the clever pig which has eaten the evil wolf and proved that righteous will win over evil ones.
Lealofi
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Several further recommendations (using Lewis's recommended alternative).
Make the first sentence active rather than passive, and "interpretation" would better be replaced by the more accurate "example" or "story."
"The classic conflict between good and evil is shown by the first story."
Because "and" can be placed between "clever" and "good" without changing the meaning -- that is, both clever and good modify "pig" -- add a comma between the two. Also academic convention when discussing criticism is to use present tense. Finally, and this is subject to some debate, "that" may not be necessary.
"The clever, good pig has eaten the evil wolf and proves righteousness can win over evil."
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answered Mar 10 '12 at 02:26
Jeff Pribyl
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