problem wth sentence
I could'nt correct the sentence can you help me pls?
If I am accepted to the program, I will be happy, too.
You both are correct that this is in the passive voice, but I don't know that your corrections help the author any.
The issue comes in the form of the word "to accept." Tolley suggests a passive version, "am accepted" without ever stating who performs the act of accepting. Lewis suggests turning the verb into a noun. Both are technically correct, as is the original statement, but probably not the best for your writing.
I assume that there is some context to this. You likely are writing an application to a program. If I am reading it right, you have probably given the program a list of reasons to accept you. In addition to that list, you are saying that you will be happy if the program accepts you.
Here is a more effective way to say that, which does not get into unusual grammatical tenses.
I will be happy if the program accepts me.
I would suggest something deeper than that - perhaps describing why you will be happy, what obstacles you have overcome, what dreams you have, and what this program will mean to your family (specifically), but form-wise, my suggestion is very simple and to the point.
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