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I cannot figure out what is werong with the following sentence:

 

Gilgamesh went on a long journey to meet Utnapishtim. 

Gilgamesh went on a long journey.

Gilgamesh wanted to meet Utnapishtim. 

What is not clear?

 

Here is the paragraph in context:

 

The unlikely pair go on many adventures, but in time, Enkidu became ill and died.  Gilgamesh was heartbroken by the death of his friend.  The king also feared that one day he would also die, so the Gilgamesh began to search for the secret of eternal life. One version of the epic describes a great flood that covered the earth many years before the time of Gilgamesh. Gilgamesh went on a long journey to meet Utnapishtim. Utnapishtim was a very old man who survived the flood because one of the gods warned him of the coming deluge.  Utnapishtim told Gilgamesh, "The life that you are seeking you will never find. When the gods created man they allotted to him death, but life they retained in their own keeping." 

squinting asked Aug 04 '13 at 14:07 Mike Dowling New member

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I'm not sure, Mike.  It seems pretty clear to me.  Maybe the names tripped up the software?  In your paragraph, you mixed your tenses in the first sentence and have an added "the" in front of Gilgamesh in the third sentence.

link comment answered Aug 04 '13 at 17:10 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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