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How would I correct this sentence aademically?

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To take on the responsible job of a mother of six children and so want to better her life and her own children's lives by going back to school to get a degree and also work, just shows how she doesn't let anything hold her back.
asked Feb 09 '12 at 04:39 Naomi Haynes New member

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Taking on the responsibility of being a mother of six children and going back to school to get a degree due to the desire to better both her and her own children's lives with these only show that She does not let anything hold(keep) her back.

 

1) I looked up hold back. In some dictionaries it was: hold oneself back /forbear and withhold there were but I would not be sure if they were formal ones.

2) Please do not use any abbrevations in the written language especially for academic ones.

3)When you use infinitive with to as a noun, please control it if it really tells a particular thing. If not, prefer gerund.

Although it seems unimportant, the grammar rules never change. We change only:)

Smoking for you is bad/ Smoking is a bad habit/To smoke for you is bad. Second one should  always be in gerund form. So I prefer using gerunds. no mistake:)

4) So is a conjuction and combines two normal sentences. Or it is an adverb.

5) I think that this woman works as a mistress. If so, job word is acceptible but not with that adjective. If she looks after her own ones, it is not a job:)))

If you have a question about these,you can send it again.

link comment answered Feb 09 '12 at 07:50 balahan New member
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To add to the responsibility of being a working mother of six by going back to school to get her degree to improve the lives of herself and her children, just shows how she doesn't let anything hold her back.
link edited Feb 09 '12 at 13:42 Lindsey York Contributor

Nb., in the UK we would say university or college, as school refers only to primary and secondary education (kindergarten - high school), so as long as you are aware of your audience. Lindsey YorkFeb 09 '12 at 13:40

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