counter offensive

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how should i change this sentence?

See example:

➢ Advised a US Navy P-3 squadron while attached as Special Forces Intelligence Analyst during the OEF Philippines counter offensive.
asked Feb 05 '12 at 04:30 Christopher Mulhall New member

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I don't know what you're aiming for with your end result, but I would go for something like:

I advised a US Navy P-3 squadron, while attached as Special Forces Intelligence Analyst during the OEF Philippines counter-offensive.

(agreeing with Jody M. about the hyphen, adding a comma after 'squadron' and putting the pronoun 'I' at the start)

 

You could also rearrange the clauses:

While attached as Special Forces Intelligence Analyst, I advised a US Navy P-3 squadron, during the OEF Philippines counter-offensive.

link comment answered Feb 05 '12 at 13:46 Elvis Trundle Contributor
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I don't know anything about military terminology, but could counter offensive need a hyphen (counter-offensive)?

 

If this is part of a resume, then the structure of your sentence is fine.

link comment edited Feb 05 '12 at 15:57 Jody M. Expert
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Han's second answer sounds more natural and less confusing.

link comment answered Feb 05 '12 at 14:49 Nikki Bishop New member

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