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how I canimprove this sentence
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Good logical reasoning and analytical skills helped me to make substantial contribution to the program, which earned me recognition by managers.
tata
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I agree with both Dat and Jody:
The sentence needs to be rearranged, the article is necessary before "substantial contribution," and "good" is redundant.
To better explain Dat's point, consider what the sentence says by its existing structure.
"Good logical reasoning and analytical skills helped me to make substantial contribution to the program, which earned me recognition by managers."
1 - You have logical reasoning;
2 - You have analytical skills;
3 - Your reasoning and analytical skills helped you;
4 - With the help of those skills, you made a substantial contribution to the program;
5 - The program (not your contribution) earned you recognition by managers.
I think #5 is different than you probably intended it to be.
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answered Feb 03 '12 at 17:56
Rik Kluessendorf
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I think you should emphasize on the achievement, then explain why after. For example:
"I was recognized by managers for my good logical reasoning and analytical skills, which made a substantial contribution to the program."
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answered Feb 03 '12 at 15:33
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I agree that it should be a substantial contribution. May I suggest removing good? Does bad logical reasoning exist? Having good in there seems almost redundant.
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answered Feb 03 '12 at 17:16
Jody M.
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answered Feb 04 '12 at 23:06
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Thank you very much, I am new here and got much more help then I hoped for.
You're welcome. Only due to this particular site, I need to correct your last comment. It's than, not then. Better than something. I'd rather do this than that. (common error) Life was better then. Until then, we will have to...
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Thank you very much, I am new here and got much more then I hoped for. – tata – Feb 05 '12 at 07:06
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