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Don't know where the correction needs to be made on this sentence? If anyone can help, please thank you.

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The purpose of this article highlights a raise in disgruntle nurses that faces increase in the patient population being a lot sicker, working with fewer staff, less time at the bedside, which lead to diminish quality of care for patients.
asked Jan 23 '12 at 02:30 David Guillaume New member

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What about:

 

 

This article highlights the growth in nurses' disquiet at the fall in the quality of patient care resulting from increasing numbers of patients presenting with more serious illnesses, the reduction of staff levels and the corresponding reduction in time spent at the bedside.


I've switched the clauses around so that anyone skimming can get the meaning instantly and then find out the reasons as they progress through the sentence.

 

I've also suggested 'disquiet' over 'disgruntlement' (to put the emphasis more on concern rather than annoyance).


I hope it helps!

link answered Jan 24 '12 at 19:05 Siân Harris Expert

Thank you so much! David GuillaumeJan 27 '12 at 04:03

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This article highlights the increase in disgruntled nurses who face a sicker patient population, work with fewer staff, and spend less time at the bedside, which has lead to a diminished quality of care for patients.

link answered Jan 24 '12 at 19:39 Kimberly Expert

Thank you, Kimberly! David GuillaumeJan 27 '12 at 04:04

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My brother dose not speak enlish.Every man,woman and child are invited.The biggest house on my street have five bed room.If you don't know the meaning of this word,look it up in the dictionary.I am surprised that you have ever done it before.

link comment answered Mar 09 '12 at 08:25 Rinzin Norbu New member

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