Please comment on the sentence write-up, grammatically & otherwise
Please comment on below sentence, grammatically and otherwise.
"How do you think Goofy, your own dog, was feeling when he watched you and Edward perform together and get rounds of applause and cheering from the spectators?"
"How do you think Goofy, your own dog, felt as he watched you and Edward perform and get rounds of applause and cheers from the spectators?"
You want to keep this sentence consistent, in the same tense and voice. "...was feeling..." is passive, meaning the action (of feeling) is performed on the dog, when you want it to be active voice, where the dog feels something directly (in the voice, grammatically).
As for "cheers"...I switched it because you need to keep it consistent with the rest of the actions in that part of the sentence. "Cheering" is a gerund/action...."cheers" is a noun....which directly agrees with the other noun in that section of the sentence "rounds of applause." "Cheering" would only work if you say "....get applauding and cheering from the spectators...."
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