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As evident, there were tremendous gains, and yet, in some areas, as participates agree the gains should have been greater and more consistent

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As evident, there were tremendous gains, and yet, in some areas, as participates agree the gains should have been greater and more consistent.
asked Oct 23 '11 at 21:11 Florence Mayhall-Andrews New member

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One possibility: Though there were evidently tremendous gains in certain areas, participants agree the gains should have been greater and more consistent in other areas.

 

(I'm assuming "participates" should've been "participants," but please correct me if this is lingo)

 

 

@AaronProof

link comment edited Oct 24 '11 at 17:35 Aaron Sheldon New member
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As evident, there were tremendous gains in some areas, and yet, as the participants agreed, the gains should have been greater and more consistent across all areas.

link comment answered Oct 24 '11 at 18:37 Shaila Fernandes Expert

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