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If you are visiting London and want to experience retail at its finest, visit Harrods for a day of shopping.

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If you are visiting London and want to experience retail at its finest, visit Harrods for a day of shopping.
asked Sep 17 '11 at 10:20 Abigail Damoah New member

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I wouldn't restrict your ad to tourists, unless you're writing one for a tourist-only venue.

 

For London's finest retail shopping, visit Harrod's.

For the finest shopping experience in London, visit Harrod's.

To experience retail at its finest, visit Harrod's in London.

 

It it's for tourists only, try this:

 

Visiting London? To experience retail shopping at its finest, spend the day at Harrod's.

 

-Shelley Stout

ShelleyStout.Librifiles.com

link comment answered Sep 17 '11 at 14:57 Shelley Stout Contributor
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maybe qualify the day ot the shopping: a wonderful day of super shopping, something like that.

link comment answered Sep 17 '11 at 10:58 Mark Heyne Contributor

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