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There are numerous issues the government is trying to take over that i think should be part of our freedom as U.S. Citizens and by adding more tax on junk food will just make a lot of people angry.
asked Sep 11 '11 at 17:44
joan
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joan
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"There are numerous issues the government is trying to control that I think should be part of our freedom as U.S. Citizens. What's more, imposing tax on junk food will just make a lot of people angry."
" Make a lot of people angry " is rather low-key. You could try a stronger expression of your anger...
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answered Sep 12 '11 at 10:23
Mark Heyne
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There are numerous issues the government is trying to control that I think should be part of our freedom as U.S. Citizens, adding more tax on junk food, for example. Such a tax will just make a lot of people angry.
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answered Sep 14 '11 at 10:26
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