sentence structure
how can this sentence be better stated.
I would like to provide adequate reasoning to establish a mutual aggreement towards building a working relationship based on the compatibility of your corporate objectives and my career interest and goals.
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I would like to provide adequate reasoning to establish a mutual aggreement towards building a working relationship based on the compatibility of your corporate objectives and my career interest and goals.
David Sippio
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Our Fax Machine# KX-FL-542” is out of order since august, 2011, and the problem is still awaited.
Kindly inform the concerned department, and do the needful action on urgent base.
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answered Sep 12 '11 at 09:14
Adeel
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add commentI don't like " towards..." i would say "with a view to". However the basic idea that you want to "provide adequate reasoning" needs clarification: are you going to explain your reasons for wanting the mutual agreement in the next paragraph? If not, just say you "would like to establish a working relationship, etc"..." my interests and career goals".
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answered Sep 12 '11 at 10:18
Mark Heyne
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