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how can this sentence be better stated.

I would like to provide adequate reasoning to establish a mutual aggreement towards building a working relationship based on the compatibility of your corporate objectives and my career interest and goals.

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I would like to provide adequate reasoning to establish a mutual aggreement towards building a working relationship based on the compatibility of your corporate objectives and my career interest and goals.
asked Sep 11 '11 at 15:52 David Sippio New member

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Our Fax Machine# KX-FL-542” is out of order since august, 2011, and the problem is still awaited.

Kindly inform the concerned department, and do the needful action on urgent base.

link answered Sep 12 '11 at 09:14 Adeel New member

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I don't like " towards..." i would say "with a view to". However the basic idea that you want to "provide adequate reasoning" needs clarification: are you going to explain your reasons for wanting the mutual agreement in the next paragraph? If not, just say you "would like to establish a working relationship, etc"..." my interests and career goals".

 

link comment answered Sep 12 '11 at 10:18 Mark Heyne Contributor

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