comma splice

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does this contain a comma splice and how can I make it sound correct or be grammatically correct?

See example:

It cannot be prevented, it can only be slowed down or kept where it is-the earth's poles are warming; polar ice caps are breaking up and melting; the sea level rising, the climate is changing and temperatures increasing.
asked Sep 09 '11 at 22:30 Kelsey Schoendorf New member

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If you replace the dash with a full stop you will have two sentences, which will help.

 

You don't need the word "down" after slowed (though you can keep it if you want to).

 

You need to insert an "is" between "sea level" and "rising" (Note: people often refer to sea levels, acknowledging that levels are not the same everywhere. You can choose if you want to do this or not, but if you decide to change it use 'are'.)

 

The last comma should be a semi-colon as it's the end of your list. 

 

"It cannot be prevented, it can only be slowed or kept where it is. The earth's poles are warming; polar ice caps are breaking up and melting; the sea level is rising; the climate is changing and temperatures increasing."

 

Hope that helps!

link comment edited Sep 13 '11 at 11:40 Siân Harris Expert

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