How can I not have this statement be a delanging modifer?

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Since the most recent new iniative Common Core Curriculum has been implemented in the state of Louisiana, and surrounding states around the country, would it not be in proper practice to have each State Department of Education, alignment to institute the same policies as its neighbors so that in the long run we do what is best for ALL students in regards to promoting them or graduating them!

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Since the most recent new iniative Common Core Curriculum has been implemented in the state of Louisiana, and surrounding states around the country, would it not be in proper practice to have each State Department of Education, alignment to institute the same policies as its neighbors so that in the long run we do what is best for ALL students in regards to promoting them or graduating them!
asked Jul 11 '13 at 04:01 paula kelly New member

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I see a few problems here, but a dangling modifier is not one of them. At issue (for the most part) is the punctuation. This is a long run-on sentence, and once you correct that, it sorts itself out. In my correction, you'll notice that I've also removed some unneccessary words.

Alignment is a noun, and align (in this case) is an intransitive verb, which is why I changed that.

I also changed "in proper practice," which is stilted and awkward. I changed it to "make sense," but there are other worthwhile choices, as well.

You might want to consider the choice of "each" state, as well. Do you mean every state? If so, then that is what you should write.



    Since the most recent new iniative Common Core Curriculum has been implemented in Louisiana and surrounding states, would it not make sense to have each state Department of Education align to institute the same policies as its neighbors so that in the long run we do what is best for ALL students in regards to promoting or graduating them?

link comment edited Jul 13 '13 at 09:29 Corrie New member

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