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By minimizing hospital associated infections through nursing staff education programs health care organizations can decrease mortality and hospital care cost.

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By minimizing hospital associated infections through nursing staff education programs health care organizations can decrease mortality and hospital care costs.
asked Jun 16 '13 at 18:22 satwinder bindra New member

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By minimizing hospital-associated infections through nursing staff education, health care organizations can decrease mortality and hospital-care costs. A couple of deletions and a hyphen or two and you're there.

link comment answered Jun 17 '13 at 03:04 Brother Dave Contributor
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Further to Brother Dave's response, I would only add that "healthcare" is normally written as one word when used as an adjective, as in your example.

link comment edited Jun 17 '13 at 10:18 Michael Cranfield Expert

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