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With reconciliation of medication gives the nurse a reason to double check using the system that is in place when receiving admission and discharging of patients thus reducing medication errors

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With reconciliation of medication gives the nurse a reason to double check using the system that is in place when receiving admission and discharging of patients thus reducing medication errors.
asked Jun 16 '13 at 00:39 cynthia graham New member

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What you are missing is a subject for the verb 'gives' in the first part of the sentence. There are two ways to fix this. One way puts the sentence into passive voice.

 

With reconciliation of medication, nurses are given a reason to double check using the system that is in place when receiving admission and discharging of patients thus reducing medication errors.

 

A better way is to replace the word 'With' with 'The'. This makes 'reconciliation' the subject, keeps active voice, and eliminates the introductory prepositional phrase.

 

The reconciliation of medication gives the nurse a reason to double check using the system that is in place when receiving admission and discharging of patients thus reducing medication errors.

 

The last of the sentence requires some work also. 'Receiving' is redundant with 'admission' and confuses the sentence. You should also coordinate 'admission' and 'discharging' forms. Either use 'admitting' and 'discharging' or 'admission' and 'discharge'. I would also put a comma after 'patients' to give the reader a chance to catch his breath.

 

The reconciliation of medication gives the nurse a reason to double check using the system that is in place for the admission and discharge of patients, thus reducing medication errors.

link comment answered Jun 16 '13 at 01:20 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow
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Similar to Lewis' answer, but slightly different (and I notice they were posted nearly simultaneously lest anyone think of nefarious copy-catting): The Reconciliation-of-Medication policy ensures double-checking by nurses using the system. We are now closer to our goal of reducing medication errors during the process of patient admission and discharge.

link comment edited Jun 16 '13 at 01:25 Brother Dave Contributor

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