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This views correlates to other researchers such as Galliers & Leidner ), Ross et al. ), & Hanschke which argues that EA is not just an IT/IS related infrastructure, but rather an architecture that creates a helicopter view of an entire organisation and facilitate new business processes, and innovate ways that will enable businesses to create new products and services to meet the growing customer needs in a dynamic and competitive markets.
asked Jun 15 '13 at 19:43 Suleiman Nadabo New member

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I admire Dr. G's attempt, but it's just too long (Dr. G, did you intend for "views" to be plural?) I suspect you're from the UK from the spelling of organization - that's US style; the "s" gives you away ;<) I'll use Dr. G's sentence and break it up: This view correlates with other researchers (Galliers & Leidner, Ross et al., & Hanschke) who argue that EA is not just an IT/IS-related infrastructure. It is, rather, a structure that provides an overview of the entire organization and facilitates new business processes and innovations that will enable businesses to create new products and services. That is our company's plan for growing customer needs in a dynamic and competitive marketplace.

link comment answered Jun 16 '13 at 00:34 Brother Dave Contributor
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The sentence is rather long and should be divided into a couple of sentences. There are also some subject/verb agreement problems, and the citations in parentheses should have the publication dates included--assuming the documentation style is APA.   This is my best attempt in revising it, while leaving it in just one sentence.

 

This views correlates with other researchers (Galliers & Leidner, Ross et al., & Hanschke) who argue that EA is not just an IT/IS-related infrastructure, but rather a structure that provides an overview of the entire organisation and facilitates new business processes and innovative ways that will enable businesses to create new products and services to meet the growing customer needs in a dynamic and competitive market.

link comment answered Jun 15 '13 at 23:28 Dr. G Contributor

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