Should this paragraph be re-written?

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Should this paragraph be re-written?

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A heat producing appliance that employs a combustion chamber having no openings other than the flue collar, fuel charging door, and adjustable openings provided to control the amount of combustion air that enters the combustion chamber and includes doors with gaskets or flanges that permit tight closure and glass or ceramic panels which must be tightly sealed or gasketed at their frames.
asked Jun 13 '13 at 19:54 Lyndy Lutz New member

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A paragraph is generally more than one sentence. This is a very long incomplete sentence. It seems to be a description of something, but there is no verb to make a sentence.

link comment edited Jun 13 '13 at 22:23 Patty T Grammarly Fellow
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I would write this if the object is to simply clarify the sentence provided.   "A heat producing appliance employing a combustion chamber with no openings other than the flue collar, fuel charging door, and adjustable openings (provided to control the amount of combustion air that enters the combustion chamber); includes doors with gaskets or flanges to permit tight closure; and glass or ceramic panels, all of which must be tightly sealed or gasketed at their frames."

link comment answered Jun 13 '13 at 20:06 Linda Ofshe New member
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Should it be re-written? it should be burned and buried ;<) But I must ask (am compelled to ask): how can an object be considered to be having no openings when, in the next line, three openings are described? I will put it down to science of which I have a dearth of knowledge. I will give it a try, though, for the sake of the language and your paper:  (Our invention/product is) a heat-producing appliance that employs a combustion chamber having only the flue collar, fuel charging door and adjustable opening. These are provided to control the amount of air entering the combustion chamber. The product includes doors with gaskets or flanges that permit tight closure and glass or ceramic panels which must be tightly sealed or gasketed at their frames.  

link comment edited Jun 16 '13 at 02:50 Brother Dave Contributor

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