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Prevention is possible only through genetic testing and then planning on whether to have children or not in cases that turn out to be positive.
The sentence doesn't make sense. Genetic testing doesn't prevent passing on a genetic disorder. Choosing "whether or not" to have children doesn't prevent it because that includes people who choose to have children regardless of the results. I would be more specific than "having children" as well since there are other ways to have children without contributing biologically.
Prevention is possible only by choosing to not conceive when genetic testing results are positive.
|link||edited Jun 08 '13 at 00:30 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
I don't have a problem with the original sentence. I think we can sometimes get hung up on technicalities. Let's face it, there are any number of ways to present your thoughts within grammatical guidelines. Guida's answer is fine, another option is to make two sentences: "Prevention is possible only through genetic testing. If the results are positive, the parents can then make an informed decision for family planning." Different words, same meaning broken down, so it becomes less of a grammatical conundrum. Patty is a "fellow" and I only a "new member," so I hesitate to point this out, but the discussion is grammar, not science nor what is politically correct. The original sentence isn't perfect, but I understood the meaning and I think most people would; so it doesn't "doesn't make sense." (Now there's a sentence that needs work!)
|link||edited Jun 08 '13 at 02:52 Brother Dave Contributor|
Do not get too invested in expressing these thoughts in one sentence. You may not be able to state all the information in a single sentence. Another tangent could be something like the following: Prevention is a two-step process: testing for genetic anomalies, then making birth-control decisions influenced by the results of that testing.
|link comment||answered Jun 08 '13 at 18:46 Katherine Patrick New member|
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