Economic development

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is the sentence confusing and if yes why

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Despite the differences in defining LED; according to Rogerson academia and practitioners agree that LED can be used as a means to bring stakeholders together to jointly improve the local economy and in the process potentially address challenges in relation to poverty.
asked Jun 07 '13 at 07:51 Lionel Joseph Phillips New member

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 (fragment) Despite the differences in defining LED; according to Rogerson academia and practitioners agree (unclear) that LED can be used as a means to bring stakeholders together to jointly improve the local economy and in the process potentially address (unclear) challenges in relation to poverty.

 

I would rewrite the whole thing making sure my subjects and predicates are clear (who does what) in each sentence.

link comment answered Jun 08 '13 at 02:21 Elin Tomov Contributor
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Lionel, I agree with Elin, but you also have some wordiness here.  Does this variation still exact the meaning you were trying for?   Despite the differences in defining LED, Rogerson academia and practitioners agree that LED can be used to bring stakeholders together to improve the local economy and therefore, potentially address challenges related to poverty.

link comment answered Jun 08 '13 at 03:17 Kathy Rexford New member
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It's confusing because it has punctuation errors and awkward wording. Elin T is correct in recommending that the revision should have each subject and verb clearly paired. One suggested revision could be something like this: "According to Rogerson, and despite the differences in defining LED, academicians and practitioners agree that LED can be used to bring stakeholders together to improve the local economy and in the process potentially address challenges to poverty."

 

As for "Despite the differences in defining LED," it cannot be followed by a semicolon because it's not a complete sentence. It also doesn't work well in front of "according to Rogerson."  I also changed "academia" to "academicians" so that it would parallel the other subject, "practitioners." I also deleted the word "jointly" because you already had the similar word "together."

link comment answered Jun 08 '13 at 04:04 Dr. G Contributor

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