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This mixed method study utilized legal research and a cross-sectional survey to assess the knowledge of the right to exercise free speech of high school and college students in Texas public schools and universities.
asked Jun 01 '13 at 19:46 Elaine Warthen New member

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This mixed-method study utilized legal research and a cross-sectional survey to assess Texan public high school and university students' knowledge of the right to free speech.

link answered Jun 04 '13 at 12:44 Kimberly Expert

A good reconstruction, but I wouldn't change "Texas" to "Texan." Although it seems more correct, the use of the state's name to describe entities or activities within a state is common practice and, for me anyway, actually reads as a more natural way of saying it.

David HopcroftJun 06 '13 at 11:28

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This mixed method study utilized legal research and a cross-sectional survey to assess the knowledge of a student's right to exercise free speech in public high schools and public universities in Texas.  

link comment answered Jun 06 '13 at 14:50 Booker New member

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