how do I rephrase this sentence


Women entrepreneurs are less likely to be members of associations than men entrepreneurs it is four-times more likely that men are members of business associations.

asked May 25 '13 at 08:20 Alisha New member

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Your sentence is full of redundancy. Try not to repeat the same words in a sentence.  This is actually two sentences.  The second sentence should start with the word it.  There are many ways to rewrite this.  Here is one:


Eighty percent of business association members are men.

link comment answered May 25 '13 at 12:57 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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