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Too Wordy for Dissertation Proposal

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Response to Intervention (RTI) began as a new way of look at Learning Disabilities (LD) from two standpoints: 1) preventing students who struggle with reading from being labeled as students with disabilities when the difficulties they are facing could be resolved by different or more intense instruction and 2) providing an alternative to discrepancy formulas (achievement in comparison to IQ) for identifying students as having LD who instead need "specialized instruction" as required by federal law (the Individuals with Disabilities Education Improvement Act of 2004 [IDEA 2004]).
asked May 04 '13 at 18:19 Patricia King New member

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I agree. There is so much here, I can't even follow what you are proposing. Perhaps if you look at some examples of dissertation proposals, you will better understand how to form one.

link comment answered May 04 '13 at 19:03 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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