Can you please review this sentence for comma splices?
Im currently writting an essay to recieve a scholarship on my dual credit classes. i am having trouble understanding the instructions i was given over comma splices.
I pray that my designs will be able to inspire others into the same career choice, much like Frank Gehry, Santiago Calatrava, and Renzo Piano inspired me.
Comma splices are when you separate two independent clauses with a comma and nothing else, instead of using a semicolon, a period, or a comma + conjunction. You're not doing that here, since your second clause ("much like ...") isn't independent. You don't need to change your punctuation.
One thing I'd change, though, is the phrase "into the same career choice." Though I understand your meaning, it reads a little awkward, since "inspire into" isn't a common phrase. How about this instead:
I pray that my designs will inspire others to choose the same career, much like Frank Gehry, Santiago Calatrava, and Renzo Piano inspired me.
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