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How would you rewrite the sentence

As per our conversation this week, we will do everything we can to assist you to determine which product was used on your 2009 post & crown procedure by Dr. Liebman.

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As per our conversation this week, we will do everything we can to assist you to determine which product was used on your 2009 post & crown procedure by Dr. Liebman.
asked Apr 29 '13 at 17:34 Jean Werner New member

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Your sentence is pretty long and winding. I'd recommend cutting out as many phrases as you can while still getting your point across.

 

As per this week's conversation, we will do everything we can to determine which product was used on your 2009 post & crown procedure.

link comment answered Apr 29 '13 at 19:00 Actually Holly Expert
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"Actually Holly" had a good fix.

Here's my suggestion:

Per this week's conversation, we will do everything possible to determine which product Dr. Liebman used in your 2009 post and crown procedure.

(Note no ampersand. Too informal for this usage.)

Cheers!

link comment answered Apr 29 '13 at 22:09 Patti New member

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