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How can this sentence be rewritten in fewer words?

 

If one were to measure the joy that is reciprocated when a gift of love is given, all a person would have had to do is look into the faces of volunteers as they returned from distributing gifts of love from the event that took place last Wednesday.

run-on wordy asked Apr 24 '13 at 15:50 Editor J New member

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Here's a shorter version that I tried to keep close to your meaning:

 

To see the true joy that comes from giving, all you'd have to do is look into the faces of the volunteers as they returned from distributing gifts of love after last Wednesday's events.

link comment answered Apr 24 '13 at 16:22 Actually Holly Expert

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