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We will remember as the magical time in our lives when all of our closest family and friends come together to be a part of our coming together.

asked Apr 22 '13 at 06:52 Enneti Navya New member

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Even though the remembering (will remember) is in the future, you need a past tense verb (came together) to express the past-ness of the memory.  The preposition as has no meaning in this sentence, so needs to be deleted.  The more natural word order is closest friends and family. The repetition of coming together in the same sentence as came together is awkward; change the latter reference to wedding if appropriate.  We will remember the magical time in our lives when all of our closest friends and family came together to be a part of our wedding.

link comment answered Apr 22 '13 at 09:17 Shawn Mooney Expert

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