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In this era of economic crises, societal changes, and complex health care system, nurses should be proactive in their knowledge development, including continuing education, certifications and be a member of nursing organization.

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In this era of economic crises, societal changes, and complex health care system, nurses should be proactive in their knowledge development, including continuing education, certifications and be a member of nursing organization.
asked Apr 10 '13 at 19:59 Merlyn Chua New member

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I think there is an issue of parallelism.  Your sentence should be uniform.

...nurses should be proactive in their knowledge development, including continuing education, necessary certifications, and membership in a respected nursing organization. This rewrite contains all nouns {parallel}.  If you look at the way the statement is written, you will notice that you list two nouns and then jump to a verb --be a member, etc. Membership  is a more logical choice.  The flow of the sentence is nicer.  Hope this helps.  Also, I'm not sure you need the word, "system", in the first part of the sentence.  Why not write:  In this era of economic crises, societal changes, and complex health care. . .

link comment answered Apr 10 '13 at 21:39 Peggy Knott New member

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