Rewrite emphasizing the war drug on in comparison to the time it took to acutally capture Saddam

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Sadly, the capture of Saddam Hussein and collecting information on the weapons of mass destruction was relatively quick in comparison to the wars actual length.  

asked Mar 26 '13 at 20:01 Wilganowskis New member

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Sadly: this sentence adverb is not great; the emotion is misplaced here.  A better one would be unfortunately

 

collecting information on the weapons of mass destruction: this is too imprecise.  I think you are referring to the important fact that no weapons of mass destruction were found, so you should say so.

 

wars: how many wars? Only one.  You mean war's

link comment answered Mar 26 '13 at 22:21 Shawn Mooney Expert

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