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An epidemic of violence results when guns and even assault rifles can be purchased from unlicensed merchants at gun shows without a criminal background check and proper registration.
asked Mar 13 '13 at 22:28 Freda Tetteh New member

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An epidemic of violence results when guns, and even assault rifles, are allowed to be purchased from unlicensed merchants at gun shows where they do not check for proper ownership registration or for criminal backgrounds before selling the weapons (to complete strangers).

link comment answered Mar 14 '13 at 01:47 Danielle Minkler Contributor

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