rephrase a sentence

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how to rephrase this I keep making changes but doesnt help

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To be ready for changes in health care it will require higher educational degrees.
asked Mar 11 '13 at 01:09 Lea Anne New member

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This is written awkwardly, but it can be readily fixed. As written, there is an introductory clause which should be separated with a comma after the word 'care'. 'It' is the subject of the predicate 'will require'. This still reads awkwardly, at least to me. The pronoun 'it' doesn't have an apparent antecedent.

 

To be ready for changes in health care, it will require higher educational degrees.

 

Another way would be to remove 'it' from the sentence. This would make the infinitive phrase starting with 'To be...' the subject.

 

To be ready for changes in health care will require higher educational degrees.

 

 

A different approach would be to change the order to the sentence and make a clear subject. I'm unsure of the correlation you have drawn between changes in health care and higher degrees, however. It sounds like you are calling for degrees higher than the current doctorate and MD degrees. If you mean we will need more physicians to meet the demands of more people being able to access health care, this approach might work.

 

The country will require more physicians to meet the demands created by health care changes.

link comment answered Mar 11 '13 at 12:01 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow
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link comment answered Apr 02 '13 at 22:46 jessie kamalondo New member
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Women entrepreneurs are less likely to be members of associations than men entrepreneurs it is four-times more likely that men are members of business associations.

link comment answered May 25 '13 at 08:17 Alisha New member
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who will require higher education degrees?  you lack a subject.

link comment answered Mar 11 '13 at 01:34 Frederic Bull New member

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