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Interest groups, such as those defined by Wilson (2008), have played a significant role in the evolution of American politics. Loomis, Francia, and Strolovitch (2011) imply American interest groups have possessed the right to lobby the American government since the late 1700s. Indeed, organized interests that existed in the eighteenth century were much different from the interest groups that formed in the late nineteenth century and, even more so, the late twentieth century; nevertheless, interest-based politics of the 1700s profoundly influenced the strategies and tactics of interest groups founded decades and centuries later as the American government expanded and matured.

asked Mar 11 '13 at 00:49 Brandon |Haphazard| New member

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When Indeed comes at the beginning of a sentence it means in fact and the sentence is supposed to contrast with some previous statement; in this text, that is not the meaning of indeed; you mean to concede the difference between 17th c. interest groups, on the one hand, and later ones.  So put indeed just before much different and that meaning is clear.

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