How can improve this sentence? I am little confused on the changes.
While a scholar-practitioner in clinical research, ought to learn the best practices in clinical research, and they gain a greater understanding of what you will doing in the profession.
Your constuction of the sentence is confusing. First, I'll remove the comma after the first 'research'. This comma should come at the end of the introductory dependent clause. I'll replace 'ought to' with 'should'. The comma after the second 'research' marks the end of the clause. What follows should be the independent clause. Because you started with 'while', the dependent clause should offer a contradictory thought. It's similar to 'even though'. Your dependent clause doesn't do this, however, it expands on the introductory thought. Now I will change the dependent clause to an independent clause by removing 'while'. Next, I'll 'so that'. This shows a cause and effect relationship. Last, I'll change 'you' to 'they' and 'A schola-...' to the plural to make everything agree in number.
Scholar-practitioners in clinical research should learn the best practices in clinical research so that they gain a greater understanding of what they will doing in the profession.
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