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Thinking about it now maybe a more appropriate title could have been something along the lines of the following: Bullet Points of American History, American History: The Cliff Notes Version, or even American History: A View of What is Really Important from the Federal Government and the Publisher's Perspective.

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Thinking about it now maybe a more appropriate title could have been something along the lines of the following: Bullet Points of American History, American History: The Cliff Notes Version, or even American History: A View of What is Really Important from the Federal Government's and the Publisher's Perspective.
asked Feb 27 '13 at 02:41 Nancy New member

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You really need to do some heave editing and get rid of a lot of this. The first part rambles on too much. I would also italicize the titles to make them stand out. If this is to be published, you don't want to 'Cliff Notes' in the title.

 

In retrospect, I've thought of three other titles that are more appropriate:  Bullet Points of American History, American History: The Cliff Notes Version, and American History: A View of What is Really Important from the Federal Government's and the Publisher's Perspective.

link comment answered Feb 27 '13 at 03:45 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

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