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rephrase this sentence correctly for me please.

I instantly got angry and forced myself to compose myself while some of the other kids were cheering them on.

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I instantly got angry and forced myself to compose myself while some of the other kids were cheering them on.
asked Feb 24 '13 at 20:19 Marie Richardson New member

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I recommend using but instead of and in this sentence.  You got angry, but did something other than show that anger.  “Forced myself to compose myself” is very awkward.  Here are a couple alternatives I can think of:

 

but kept my composure while some … but restrained myself while some …

link comment edited Feb 25 '13 at 12:10 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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